This made me cry. Such longing, depth, and desire carried in these words. I found my soul singing along in praise and humble gratitude. You’re, a poet Laura! Truly! ❤️
Faithful Recovery, your response highlights one of the poem's greatest strengths: it does not merely describe praise, it invites the reader into it. The longing Laura expresses feels so authentic that the movement toward gratitude becomes something readers can participate in rather than simply observe. A poem that can draw tears and worship from another person's heart has accomplished something meaningful. Thank you for naming so beautifully the impact these words had on you.
Asuka, your phrase *"the real cry is making a mess behind it"* captures the tension at the heart of Laura's poem. Many people become skilled at singing the acceptable song, the one that keeps life moving and appearances intact, while deeper longings remain hidden behind the curtain. Part of what makes this piece resonate is that it refuses to leave the cry concealed; it follows it all the way through to the place where honesty becomes worship. Thank you for adding an image that deepens the conversation and names an experience many readers will recognize.
I always enjoy a poem with rhythm and rhyme, Laura. This one is poignant because it portrays the choice between the material world of man and the spiritual world of God, between satisfying superficial desires and spiritual fulfillment. I love the last stanza.
Laura, the movement of this poem feels like a journey from suppression to surrender. The opening sections carry the tension of a soul trying to silence its deepest longing, while the later verses reveal what happens when that longing is finally given voice and allowed to become worship. I was especially drawn to the musical imagery throughout, because the dissonance is never eliminated so much as resolved into a larger harmony, one that transforms struggle into praise. Thank you for sharing a poem that portrays intimacy with God not as escape from inner conflict, but as the place where the heart finally finds its true song.
Thank you so much!! I am deeply honored by the time you take to read and so beautifully articulate your comments. I am so appreciative of your heart! I am sincerely glad we crossed paths here! You write with such depth and understanding! God bless you!
Laura, I appreciate your generous words. One reason the poem resonated with me is that it refuses to treat longing as a problem to be solved. The yearning itself becomes part of the path, carrying the speaker from resistance into deeper communion with God. That movement reflects a spiritual truth many people recognize only through experience: the very places we try hardest to silence are often the places where grace is already inviting us into greater wholeness. Thank you for sharing your gift so faithfully and for creating space where others can hear echoes of their own journey in your words.
I’m so glad the message came across! That’s what I was feeling and wanting to convey! Thank you for your thoughts! And you’re welcome! ☺️ so appreciate you!
This made me cry. Such longing, depth, and desire carried in these words. I found my soul singing along in praise and humble gratitude. You’re, a poet Laura! Truly! ❤️
Thanks so much! I really appreciate that! 🥹. That means so much!! ❤️
Faithful Recovery, your response highlights one of the poem's greatest strengths: it does not merely describe praise, it invites the reader into it. The longing Laura expresses feels so authentic that the movement toward gratitude becomes something readers can participate in rather than simply observe. A poem that can draw tears and worship from another person's heart has accomplished something meaningful. Thank you for naming so beautifully the impact these words had on you.
I could do nothing else!
The curtain held in place... I know that little outside-song too, the one arranged to look acceptable while the real cry is making a mess behind it...
Yes and it really does make a mess. Thanks for reading this and sharing! 😊
Asuka, your phrase *"the real cry is making a mess behind it"* captures the tension at the heart of Laura's poem. Many people become skilled at singing the acceptable song, the one that keeps life moving and appearances intact, while deeper longings remain hidden behind the curtain. Part of what makes this piece resonate is that it refuses to leave the cry concealed; it follows it all the way through to the place where honesty becomes worship. Thank you for adding an image that deepens the conversation and names an experience many readers will recognize.
This is beautiful, Laura ❤️
Thanks Donna! I appreciate that so much!
I always enjoy a poem with rhythm and rhyme, Laura. This one is poignant because it portrays the choice between the material world of man and the spiritual world of God, between satisfying superficial desires and spiritual fulfillment. I love the last stanza.
Thank you so much! I really appreciate your comments! They mean so much! 🤗
Beautiful!
Thank you so much! I really appreciate that! ♥️
Laura, the movement of this poem feels like a journey from suppression to surrender. The opening sections carry the tension of a soul trying to silence its deepest longing, while the later verses reveal what happens when that longing is finally given voice and allowed to become worship. I was especially drawn to the musical imagery throughout, because the dissonance is never eliminated so much as resolved into a larger harmony, one that transforms struggle into praise. Thank you for sharing a poem that portrays intimacy with God not as escape from inner conflict, but as the place where the heart finally finds its true song.
Thank you so much!! I am deeply honored by the time you take to read and so beautifully articulate your comments. I am so appreciative of your heart! I am sincerely glad we crossed paths here! You write with such depth and understanding! God bless you!
Laura, I appreciate your generous words. One reason the poem resonated with me is that it refuses to treat longing as a problem to be solved. The yearning itself becomes part of the path, carrying the speaker from resistance into deeper communion with God. That movement reflects a spiritual truth many people recognize only through experience: the very places we try hardest to silence are often the places where grace is already inviting us into greater wholeness. Thank you for sharing your gift so faithfully and for creating space where others can hear echoes of their own journey in your words.
I’m so glad the message came across! That’s what I was feeling and wanting to convey! Thank you for your thoughts! And you’re welcome! ☺️ so appreciate you!